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Sample C Dear Sirs with reference to your letter dated 18 October 2004 concerning rental for a new factory unit suitable. I am writing to inform you that our company Arvon Industrial Park will meet your need. Firstly our park is located immediately to the high way. The transportations here are very convenient. There is also a railway station around. Secondly our industrial park offers 24-hours security services and auto fire-resistant system. Thirdly we have enough parking places for staff parking which can accommodate 300 cars. Furthermore our electricity facilities were improved last year. Now we can offer whole day electricity supply. Finally I would like to tell you that if you have long-term rental with us we will provide you with 10 percent discount for the first two years' rental. I do hope we can be your supplier in the future please contact us at our earliest convenience. Yours faithfully Band 4 The letter addresses all the content points and these are expanded upon appropriately. The register and format are consistently appropriate and the content is well organised. Good language control is demonstrated and a wide range of vocabulary and grammar structures is used. Sample D Thank you for your interest in renting a unit at our Industrial Park. I am sure that Arvon Industrial Park is the right choice for you as it's very close to the airport and the city centre. The railway station is also nearby. The access to the Motorway is only 200m away. The Park is surrounded by a fence and all visitors have to check in at the Porter's gate. During the night it's observed by the Security Service people. We also can offer you a parking space for 300 cars. There shouldn't be any problem with the electricity supply since the system has been modernised last year. We could offer you a lower price in case you aim for a long term rental contract. If you have any further questions I Would be pleased to answer them. I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Band 3 All the content points are covered and the organisation of the information is satisfactory. A reasonable attempt has been made at a letter format although the opening and closing formulae are missing and at times the register is not wholly appropriate.
Sample C Dear Sirs with reference to your letter dated 18 October 2004 concerning rental for a new factory unit suitable. I am writing to inform. you that our company, Arvon Industrial Park will meet your need. Firstly, our park is located immediately to the high way. The transportations here are very convenient. There is also a railway station around. Secondly, our industrial park offers 24-hours security services and auto fire-resistant system. Thirdly, we have enough parking places for staff parking, which can accommodate 300 cars. Furthermore, our electricity facilities were improved last year. Now we can offer whole day electricity supply. Finally I would like to tell you that if you have long-term rental with us, we will provide you with 10 percent discount for the first two years' rental. I do hope we can be your supplier in the future, please contact us at our earliest convenience. Yours faithfully Band 4 The letter addresses all the content points and these are expanded upon appropriately. The register and format are consistently appropriate and the content is well organised. Good language control is demonstrated, and a wide range of vocabulary and grammar structures is used. Sample D Thank you for your interest in renting a unit at our Industrial Park. I am sure, that Arvon Industrial Park is the right choice for you as it's very close to the airport and the city centre. The railway station is also nearby. The access to the Motorway is only 200m away. The Park is surrounded by a fence and all visitors have to check in at the Porter's gate. During the night it's observed by the Security Service people. We also can offer you a parking space for 300 cars. There shouldn't be any problem with the electricity supply, since the system has been modernised last year. We could offer you a lower price in case you aim for a long term rental contract. If you have any further questions I Would be pleased to answer them. I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Band 3 All the content points are covered and the organisation of the information is satisfactory. A reasonable attempt has been made at a letter format, although the opening and closing formulae are missing and at times the register is not wholly appropriate.